Show Not Tell

Walking into my room the moon shone onto me through the window I closed my curtain. Outside I could hear owls hooting and dogs howling. Putting down my steaming cup of hot chocolate I put it down on my draw and jumped into bed. I snuggled up into my blanket. The wind was rattling against my window and the brunches scraping.

Fear!.

Running late from training, I took the shortcut through the alleyway. Entering into the alleyway, I suddenly saw shadows appearing at the other end. "Mums probably thinking where I am about now"I start to hear strange noises, my legs start trembling as sweat drips down from my forehead.

Walking halfway through the alleyway, my hearts starts pounding faster and faster. I tried avoiding the strange noises, but it was like glued to my head. Getting closer and closer, "AAAAAAH" I screamed, as a small cat came purring out of a bush.

Show Not Tell Writing!..

SHOW NOT TELL!...

Angry!..

Emily Started to roll her eye's. A red started to appear on her face. She would go into her room, punch her face on her pillow and start to scream.  As her sister Laura came to apologize Laura could hear Emily stomp her feet and slammed the door in front of Laura’s Face.

Nervous!..

Keri’s palm’s started to sweat. Doubts started to appear in her mind. She felt like running away from her netbook trial but she knew is she did she will be ready. The teacher who was taking the netball trial called Keri to go on the court because it’s her turn. Goosebumps started to grow on her skin